A Gothic Horror Story

[Box-monkey]

Constructive criticism would be good.
Warning: Lots of text


<div class='spoiler_toggle'>Spoiler: click to toggle</div><div class="spoiler" style="display:none;">As I wait at the top of the steps, and see the approaching tourists, I know this day will be a long one. There was one person who seemed to be by himself, he was wearing a long brown trench coat, and his hat was pulled down over his face.

 

[Josh]

I've skin read this, Sounds good. But it would be better if you put paragrahs.

 

[Box-monkey]

I've skin read this, Sounds good. But it would be better if you put paragrahs.

That's exactly what my teacher said.

 

[Mr. L]

it's all squished together i can't read it that good.....try putting it in paragraphs like Josh said.