Another Poem I Made

[kierraaa-]

I hold on tight to wishes wished
To distant cries of love's lament
To parts of you I used to know
When you had strength and self-control
I fear that you have been misplaced
That you're content to know a grave
That I am not enough to glue
The tiny, shattered parts of you

In my head I always think
If you cared, you'd set it down
You wouldn't take another sip
You'd know that's all it takes to drown
And in my head it's not that hard
But you're the one who lives in chains
You're the one who has to fix
These broken, awful things

I hold on tight and say a prayer
That you will never know the fear
Of questioning the love of Him
Who knew our scars before we did
Who carried all the reasons why
Who carried all the hopeless lives
Who carried all the bottle caps
To clear the way for grace to pass
-Kierra

 

[Marcus]

You should make one thread to put all your work in, rather than a thread for each poem.


Anyway, it's quite good. Not your best because sometimes the rhythm goes off.

Nice story to it though B) Keep it up!

 

[kierraaa-]

You should make one thread to put all your work in, rather than a thread for each poem.


Anyway, it's quite good. Not your best because sometimes the rhythm goes off.

Nice story to it though B) Keep it up!

I thought of that too
a poem gallery,
But thanks and for this one I really wasn't trying to make it rhyme

 

[Marcus]

You should make one thread to put all your work in, rather than a thread for each poem.


Anyway, it's quite good. Not your best because sometimes the rhythm goes off.

Nice story to it though B) Keep it up!

I thought of that too
a poem gallery,
But thanks and for this one I really wasn't trying to make it rhyme

No I mean the rhythm, pace, count whatever you call it

I thought the rhymes were good.

 

[kierraaa-]

You should make one thread to put all your work in, rather than a thread for each poem.


Anyway, it's quite good. Not your best because sometimes the rhythm goes off.

Nice story to it though B) Keep it up!

I thought of that too
a poem gallery,
But thanks and for this one I really wasn't trying to make it rhyme

No I mean the rhythm, pace, count whatever you call it

I thought the rhymes were good.

Yea,
The flow of it is a bit off