Critique/help

[Aeryka]

Hey guys, I made a new OC and tried to draw him in a position I'm uncomfortable with. That being said I'd like critique/help on things that might look off before I start coloring. (eye positioning, legs, hand, face, anything)
This did take me hours to sketch out, so please don't be TOO harsh with the way you word things, thanks!
will most likely re-outline him again~

Spoiler: drawing

after v

before v

P.S: if there's some other way you think I can draw his mouth that shows he has fangs, pls lmk ;u;​

 

[riummi]

hrm well it doesnt seem like there are too many things you need to fix c: (in my opinion anyways...)

Maybe just the hand thats resting on his knee. His head also looks a bit big for his body? Perhaps, slightly lower his right eye. (right as in from our view) c:

Oh yea! As Shirohibiki said: the clothing looks a bit stuff. I can go over it in red if you want u.u cuz I can't explain it well lol

 

[Shirohibiki]

i believe the thumb would be facing inwards on that hand thats on his knee! otherwise, i think its okay! the clothes feel a bit stiff, maybe try relaxing them with different types of folds? i think its good otherwise tho

 

[FruitsChinpoG]

Damn, that is a sexy pose xD

 

[Aeryka]

hrm well it doesnt seem like there are too many things you need to fix c: (in my opinion anyways...)

Maybe just the hand thats resting on his knee. His head also looks a bit big for his body? Perhaps, slightly lower his right eye. (right as in from our view) c:

Oh yea! As Shirohibiki said: the clothing looks a bit stuff. I can go over it in red if you want u.u cuz I can't explain it well lol

I kept messing with that eye, couldn't decide how to put it since I normally don't do angles. lol Will try to lower it a bit!

Also feel free to go over it in red, now that I look at it, I understand how the clothes look a bit stiff, ty both for pointing it out xD

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Damn, that is a sexy pose xD

lmao, I tried! <3

 

[samsquared]

This is actually great as is- you could leave it this way and have no issues. My only problem is that his shoulders/back aren't broad enough. And shirohibiki hit the nail on the head about his clothing. Then the right foot is smaller than the left, though I am not sure if that's on purpose. I think his fangs are fine, but if they bother you, maybe have them hanging out of his mouth instead or in the place of other teeth? Overall, I think you did a good job. *claps*

 

[Mega_Cabbage]

His arm looks a little small/short. The back of the neck should also extend towards his ear because he is not facing completely straightforward.

 

[crystalmilktea]

Same about the arm being a bit short

 

[Aeryka]

Ty guys for the advice! ^^
I edited the first post with the changes I made. They're probably a tad unnoticeable, but I made changes to the arm/hand, back foot, neck, right eye, and clothes (even though I didn't really know what to do with the pants as much) >u< Might leave as is now, or do some more changes.