Welcome to Darkness, a fan-fic based on a very dramatic event occuring in the span of just one day in Mario's already hectic life. Pleae enjoy the fan-fic, and post any comments you may have.
~Gohan
The Nsider Version
Darkness
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Welcome to Darkness, a fan-fic based on a very dramatic event occuring in the span of just one day in Mario's already hectic life. Pleae enjoy the fan-fic, and post any comments you may have.
~Gohan
The Nsider Version
Chapter 1: Death By Dawn
Darkness.
Darkness is the room I am in; darkness is what I am feeling. Darkness is what I see when I shut my eyes for a night
Darkness.
Darkness is the room I am in; darkness is what I am feeling. Darkness is what I see when I shut my eyes for a night
Chapter 2: A Breath of Life
Life.
Life is what keeps us going; life is what I breathe in each breath. Life is what I have lost
Life.
Life is what keeps us going; life is what I breathe in each breath. Life is what I have lost
Happiness.
We need it to survive. It is the only worthy combatant of many feelings, the only way to win many fights. Happiness is what we strive for.
~~~
Chapter 3: Strive for Happiness
I was off on my journey, but this time I knew exactly what I was to do. I knew who had my love, my life, my happiness. Him.
He usually is much less sly in his dealings, but everyone changes; even him.
I signaled to be let into his castle. The bridge was lowered, the door open. Could this be the door that led to her? I hoped, but I did not know.
Right then a guard knocked me on the head with his club. By the time I realized what was happening, two Koopas had me locked in their arms, while they dragged me to an unknown place.
The three of us went through the grandest door leading from the entrance hall. It was a gigantic doorway, with a theater-like red curtain hiding what lie beneath it in mystery to myself. The curtain was pulled by another Koopa guard manning the doorway.
The room was dark. Not just dark, but black as a night with no stars or no moon. Black as my happiness, no light to spark it one bit; no light to guide me.
We took a turn somewhere in the dark room, I think to the left. I was too concentrated on what my destiny beheld to notice such a trivial detail.
"Gah!" said the guard to my left. He had stubbed his toe on the wall. I guess even the Koopas didn't know the castle when it was so dark inside. But we were only a step from the door they had been looking for. Once again, my heart beat faster as we walked through the door; could this be the door to unlock my love, my life, my happiness?
My happiness does not come from Bowser, so in turn you could say my happiness was not in the room beyond that last door. Bowser was there, on his nice royal throne, chuckling to see his enemy in such a distraught state.
"Good afternoon, my little friend. I've been expecting you for a while now," Bowser said, almot as though he was keeping something from me. As to what he was keeping, I did now know.
He told all of the guards in the room to leave, and escorted me to another room, which I guess you could call his study. He sat in a larger-than-normal chair, and I took a seat in the only other chair in the room, a woobly, old, wooden chair. It creaked every time I budged, and as nervous as I was at the moment, it was as loud as a full orchestra.
Bowser offered me some Koopa Tea. It had been a while since I drank anything, so I accepted the tea, nonetheless reluctantly.
As I readied to listen to Bowser, he surprised me... he did something I had never seen him do before; cry.
Note: If you want the fancy stuff, either read this at Nsider, or tell Storm to allow HTML here.
We need it to survive. It is the only worthy combatant of many feelings, the only way to win many fights. Happiness is what we strive for.
~~~
Chapter 3: Strive for Happiness
I was off on my journey, but this time I knew exactly what I was to do. I knew who had my love, my life, my happiness. Him.
He usually is much less sly in his dealings, but everyone changes; even him.
I signaled to be let into his castle. The bridge was lowered, the door open. Could this be the door that led to her? I hoped, but I did not know.
Right then a guard knocked me on the head with his club. By the time I realized what was happening, two Koopas had me locked in their arms, while they dragged me to an unknown place.
The three of us went through the grandest door leading from the entrance hall. It was a gigantic doorway, with a theater-like red curtain hiding what lie beneath it in mystery to myself. The curtain was pulled by another Koopa guard manning the doorway.
The room was dark. Not just dark, but black as a night with no stars or no moon. Black as my happiness, no light to spark it one bit; no light to guide me.
We took a turn somewhere in the dark room, I think to the left. I was too concentrated on what my destiny beheld to notice such a trivial detail.
"Gah!" said the guard to my left. He had stubbed his toe on the wall. I guess even the Koopas didn't know the castle when it was so dark inside. But we were only a step from the door they had been looking for. Once again, my heart beat faster as we walked through the door; could this be the door to unlock my love, my life, my happiness?
My happiness does not come from Bowser, so in turn you could say my happiness was not in the room beyond that last door. Bowser was there, on his nice royal throne, chuckling to see his enemy in such a distraught state.
"Good afternoon, my little friend. I've been expecting you for a while now," Bowser said, almot as though he was keeping something from me. As to what he was keeping, I did now know.
He told all of the guards in the room to leave, and escorted me to another room, which I guess you could call his study. He sat in a larger-than-normal chair, and I took a seat in the only other chair in the room, a woobly, old, wooden chair. It creaked every time I budged, and as nervous as I was at the moment, it was as loud as a full orchestra.
Bowser offered me some Koopa Tea. It had been a while since I drank anything, so I accepted the tea, nonetheless reluctantly.
As I readied to listen to Bowser, he surprised me... he did something I had never seen him do before; cry.
Note: If you want the fancy stuff, either read this at Nsider, or tell Storm to allow HTML here.
OddCrazyMe said:
Propaganda Man
Senior Member
I only have read the first chapter so far and it seems to be written in this pattern.
This happened and this happened and that happened.
I didn't read anything but the first chapter. And it was rather annoying not knowing if this character was a boy or girl. If it was short, stubby, or even felt. Introduction is everything in getting poeple to read.
I'm not saying you are bad at writing but try to make it flow better such as...
This happened and this happened and that happened.
I didn't read anything but the first chapter. And it was rather annoying not knowing if this character was a boy or girl. If it was short, stubby, or even felt. Introduction is everything in getting poeple to read.
I'm not saying you are bad at writing but try to make it flow better such as...
Sorry you don't like my style.
Fabioisonfire
total a-hole
You mean my stlye.DarthGohan1 said:
Anyway, good work. I've read the *other* chapters, and it's good.
No...lol...POKEFAB said:You mean my stlye.DarthGohan1 said:
Anyway, good work. I've read the *other* chapters, and it's good.
And thanks.
Now I don't wanna be all flamy but please reconsidder your thoughts, they are suggesting something to help you improve and you can't see past the fact that they said something bad about your writing and therefore refuse to take any of the information they give you. Now this has happened all too many times, not only with you, but also with a countless amount of people, and trust me, I, of all people, know.
Now take from this what you will but the "If you don't have anything nice to say, don't say anything at all" excuse has never been right its just to stop fights, but in the end nobody gains from it.
LET people say bad things about your work, even if they don't suggest anything to do, you can take what they didn't like and stop doing that in your next peice of artwork/writing. But don't ever put a block on people's minds, because, that harms not only them, but you too.
Now take from this what you will but the "If you don't have anything nice to say, don't say anything at all" excuse has never been right its just to stop fights, but in the end nobody gains from it.
LET people say bad things about your work, even if they don't suggest anything to do, you can take what they didn't like and stop doing that in your next peice of artwork/writing. But don't ever put a block on people's minds, because, that harms not only them, but you too.
Fabioisonfire
total a-hole
Darth, what I meant by 'similar styles', read this. Do they sound at ALL similar? <_<
