Music Critique! No skill required, just public opinions!!!

[EconomicPig]

So I thought I was done working with Bubblegum K.K. , but I'm not too happy with it. *Please note this is a vocaloid cover (a robot singer) and the instrumental wasn't made by me*
https://soundcloud.com/piano-piggie/bubblegum-kk-demo
The only things I am debating on (please comment in this forum or on the soundcloud page on what I should do) :
1) Does the backround sound appropriate?
I based the vocals off this 8-bit version I found, I'm giving credit to the creator if I use it but I'm not sure weather it matches the vocals or not. I am considering making my own instrumental (I have a piano,ukelele, and violin) or using the aircheck version (the cd version)
2) Should I change the lyrics?
Right now she is using english lyrics based on some I found online (I tweaked it a little) She is SUPPOSED to be used for Japanese so her English pronounciations are HORRIBLE. I'm thinking of switching to K.K Language, where he just says random words (he mo mo ta kwi, etc.)
Any other opinions are welcomed. I really want to hear from you guys My much much horrible works are right here -> https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCRP209KB96FDz2OzKdJM14A
Please I really appreciate your feedback everyone!

 

[Beardo]

Background sounds good, and I would suggest KK language

 

[cannedcommunism]

Maybe add a little more bass to the background. Other than that, it's great!

 

[Alpa The Apple]

I like it! What vocaloid did you use if I may ask?

 

[EconomicPig]

Oh I used Iroha [natural]! She has a 30 day free trial, but you also need to get a 14 day free trial of Vocaloid 4. Lots of google translate needed xD

 

[Alpa The Apple]

Oh I used Iroha [natural]! She has a 30 day free trial, but you also need to get a 14 day free trial of Vocaloid 4. Lots of google translate needed xD

Hmm I haven't heard of that one. I listen to the main ones plus some uncommon ones.

 

[EconomicPig]

Hmm I haven't heard of that one. I listen to the main ones plus some uncommon ones.

Yeah Iroha was originally a v2 vocaloid, her version 4 came out last month so ye ;D

 

[Alpa The Apple]

Yeah Iroha was originally a v2 vocaloid, her version 4 came out last month so ye ;D

Oo I might have to check that out.

 

[doveling]

this is adorable! LOVE IT~

 

[timecapsule]

KK language but same voice would be good!
I really like it!

 

[EconomicPig]

Sooooo~ I'm going to have the original version (KK Language) public released, using my brother's cover art and have the english lyric version private released with crystalmilktea's art, you should be able to click the youtube video link in the description.
Coming soon