Nightmare Realm (My first song)

[ShadoMaster]

Hope you guys like it... Dont like my voice though sounds like im screaming...
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[Caius]

You're really super flat. You need to try and hit the melody a little better. Otherwise nice flow

 

[Jas0n]

All those doughnuts can really ruin a singing voice.

 

[Liv]

All those doughnuts can really ruin a singing voice.

Aww dang, it always comes back to the donuts doesn't it?

 

[ShadoMaster]

Thanks for the support but... I dont eat donuts... in fact im super skinny... maybe next time i will try not to yell at the mic.

 

[[Nook]]

Thanks for the support but... I dont eat donuts... in fact im super skinny... maybe next time i will try not to yell at the mic.

Nah, eat some donuts.

Donuts make the voice better, if not stuffy, which is funny.

 

[Bacon Boy]

It doesn't sound like you're yelling. Like ZR said, you sound super flat and off key. The instruments are fine.

 

[ShadoMaster]

It doesn't sound like you're yelling. Like ZR said, you sound super flat and off key. The instruments are fine.

Ok ok... how about lyrical? Do i write good?

 

[Bacon Boy]

Ok ok... how about lyrical? Do i write good?

*lyrically
*write well

 

[Zex]

euh lyrics are lame af sorry

 

[ShadoMaster]

euh lyrics are lame af sorry

*Gasp* Meanie....

 

[Zex]

*Gasp* Meanie....

that was a bad post on my part. i should offer some advice.

Dont just rap about pussys and sex because its what the famous rappers do. Rap about stuff that really touches you and makes you have shivers down your spine. It will make you seem a lot more realistic and also help you put more feeling into your verses. Your flow was good.

 

[ShadoMaster]

that was a bad post on my part. i should offer some advice.

Dont just rap about pussys and sex because its what the famous rappers do. Rap about stuff that really touches you and makes you have shivers down your spine. It will make you seem a lot more realistic and also help you put more feeling into your verses. Your flow was good.

Thanks This was my first real song i do some poems like what you told me... I will see if i can make a love song people say im good at that.

 

[Zex]

Thanks This was my first real song i do some poems like what you told me... I will see if i can make a love song people say im good at that.

Yeah do that and then see how that sounds. Also if you get tired of working on love songs look to people like Rage Against The Machine. Specifically songs like Bulls on Parade where rapping is prominant. He doenst talk about sex and guns and what not but he still kills it and you know he has true feeling for what he is rapping about.

Edit - ALSO. If rage is too hard then look at k. wests new album. although he does have reocurring sex references in some of his songs he still kills it when he is not talking about it.

 

[ShadoMaster]

KK thnx for the advice

 

[Vex L'Cour]

Moving clips would've helped visuals.
A better singing voice and beat in the back would've helped the melody
and a better lyrics set would've helped.

It's kinda terrible. But we all gotta start somewhere

 

[SockHead]

Better than I thought it would be haha. Shado sucha player.

 

[ShadoMaster]

Better than I thought it would be haha. Shado sucha player.

oh you