requesting critique

[Llust]

> http://i.imgur.com/UswdEhc.png
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[noizora]

Before my critique would you go back and take a long look and write down all the things you think you could have done better in this drawing? Then that gives a basis to give specific advice instead of more vague general ones and might be a more efficient way to give advice c:

 

[Llust]

Before my critique would you go back and take a long look and write down all the things you think you could have done better in this drawing? Then that gives a basis to give specific advice instead of more vague general ones and might be a more efficient way to give advice c:

of course. thanks for your help ~
- i feel like her mouth shape is a bit odd, but i tried countless times to fix it but this was as good as it could get
- not sure if this is just me, but her left forearm and hand looks too small compared to her overall size
- the shading is too plain in some areas, but i didnt know what to do there (like her boots, tights and skirt)
- her boots also look odd, but i can't seem to figure out what i did wrong there

 

[noizora]

of course. thanks for your help ~
- i feel like her mouth shape is a bit odd, but i tried countless times to fix it but this was as good as it could get
- not sure if this is just me, but her left forearm and hand looks too small compared to her overall size
- the shading is too plain in some areas, but i didnt know what to do there (like her boots, tights and skirt)
- her boots also look odd, but i can't seem to figure out what i did wrong there

Ok great

As for the mouth shape, the bottom lips point inwards. Taking Mirai from your sig as an example, you can see that her top lip is drawn a lot more straight then the bottom which curves inwards more like a semicircle

The size of the forearm is straight however her hand is very small. A spread palm should roughly be the same size as the face
The way the forearm connects with the elbow is a bit strange - this is a good graphic to see what an elbow looks like - and as you can see by the protruding bone from the forearm the angle is more like a right angle than a curve

As for the shading, don't be afraid to use dramatic colours. The same shadow colour should not be used on the top of the head where the light is hitting and in the area around the neck where the light can't hit it. Try to use 3-4 tones minimum with shading (2-3 dark and a highlight, you could add 1-2 accent shades too). You're going to end up using colours that might look way too dark for the base colour, but once you blend it in it will seem a lot more dynamic.

With the boots it's just that the feet aren't facing in the same direction as the rest of her body (forward while as the feet are on their side)

In general it's just small errors with proportion and the shading seems somewhat flat
If you're not doing this already you should look at references. To get better at drawing people will tell you to practice and practice and practice. They're not wrong, but one thing that is just as important as practicing is looking. Go to your favourite artists' gallery and study their pieces: how they've drawn hair, the colours they've used to shade...so on

You're definitely on the right track though! Hope this helped and keep up the good work

 

[Mitradon]

Damn you good. Keep goin fam.

 

[Albuns]

I'm not really the best at critiques, so I'll try and keep it brief~

-The hand seems a bit small, and doesn't really define the knuckles too well, could just be the positioning though.
-The boots are facing forward while the body is facing in a 3/4 direction.
-This one is a bit nitpicky, but try shading the boots in multiple hues of brown to give them a bit more contrast.

Other than that though, I'm starstruck at how well it turned out! I especially love the eyes and bow, I don't think I'll ever be able to draw eyes like those though~ ;u;

 

[KarlaKGB]

her facial expression looks like someone rammed a stick up her butt and made her into a puppet

 

[visibleghost]

i really like the way you coloured it !!! super cute!!
and the skirt is aaaaaaaa so pretty i wish i could draw skirts as well as u ;;

but i think you should practice bodies and poses, it looks a bit odd (the upper body looks fine in my opinion, but the legs need some work!!), like she's about to fall over. her legs/feet look a bit weird, both feet arent on the ground and it doesn't really look natural. the eyes are a bit too far apart (there should be space for around 1 eye between them) and the way the neck and head are connected looks a bit unnatural.
also, this might jsut be my personal preference but her facial expression is a bit.. .bland? her mouth shape is a bit weird, i suggest that you should change it up a bit and see if you could give her a facial expression that expresses emotion i guess? :>

 

[jiny]

her design is super cute, it reminds me of my oc with the cat socks. but it's really good!! i think her mouth is a bit odd though

 

[Llust]

thanks everyone! your advice really helped. i'll keep what you all said in mind

 

[pickle inkii.]

It's really nice looking, but she feels a bit stiff and awkward. Practice anatomy a bit and it will soon be perfect.