The Life of Boringness

[Lisathegreat!]

I thought I needed a little practice on writing, so I made a story myself. It looks long, and I made it in one day.. I just felt bored so I also used several TBT members. Enjoy the story..

The Life of Boringness


Hi, this is a story about a casual girl, going through a new life. She is starting a new year at school, with new people, friends, bullies, and teachers. It starts out as a.. Sunny, warm, 74 degrees day.

Azila: Mom, where are my pancakes? Mom!

Mom: Sorry, sweetie. Here are your pancakes.

They were burnt and hard as a rock. Azila ate them then jumped up with her backpack, rushing out the door, to the bus. After that she went through the bus and sat with her friends, which were Master Crash and Luvbun.

Luvbun: So Azila, are you ready?

Azila: Oh yeah!

Master Crash: I

 

[Numner]

Coffee should not teach children.

The world would slowly die-

owait

 

[Lisathegreat!]

Coffee should not teach children.

The world would slowly die-

owait

Lol, I just thought of random people... And I made this within like 30 minutes.. So just saying if I messed up on spelling or something, my bad..

 

[kierraaa-]

<333!
I love it!

 

[LaserGirlFetch]

I'm in the story...

I feel special. xD

Nice job.

 

[Tyeforce]

tl;dr version? XD

 

[MrCrazyDavis]

Version with everyone in?

 

[Josh]

Version with everyone in?

If everyone was in it, Then it'll just confuse everyone.

Also Good story.

 

[Thunder]

Bahaha, i'm always the helpless character in all the stories including me xD

Sorry, i can't help but laugh xD

Anyway, as for criticism. I gotta say that the story was a bit overused. And sometimes in the story when explaining a few things, you've gone from 3rd person, to 1st person, also you've made a few typos :T

But keep trying

 

[easpa]

You made AndyB sound like an ass.
Good job, though.

 

[merinda!]

Lol@mebeingCrash'sgf.

I laughed.

 

[Hiro]

Bahaha, that was great xD

 

[Rocketman]

The longest story I've typed is so far 184 whole pages, never got around to finishing it. I wasn't really bored, I just used to like to write a lot, but now I have no ideas.

 

[Lisathegreat!]

Bahaha, i'm always the helpless character in all the stories including me xD

Sorry, i can't help but laugh xD

Anyway, as for criticism. I gotta say that the story was a bit overused. And sometimes in the story when explaining a few things, you've gone from 3rd person, to 1st person, also you've made a few typos :T

But keep trying

Yeah, I know. I suck at making stories... Mostly cause I made it at like.. 12:00AM? Lol! Well, anyways thanks for an honest opinion! I'm still trying to work on making the story fun and cool!

And lol to most of the commets.. I would've used more people but, I didn't know what characters they should be.

 

[Bacon Boy]

Okay, but overused. You shouldn't really use people unless you get permission, they have a small cameo, or if you know them well. A bit cliche too. Bad character development.

 

[Gnome]

Lack of me disappoints. /self-centered

 

[muffun]

Why am I not in this? :throwingrottenapples:

Uh, it's okay. Too cliche'd.

 

[Ricano]

Lol @ Jenn being a teacher
It was alright

 

[John102]

Lack of me disappoints. /self-centered

^^

 

[AndyB]

Bahaha, i'm always the helpless character in all the stories including me xD

Sorry, i can't help but laugh xD

Anyway, as for criticism. I gotta say that the story was a bit overused. And sometimes in the story when explaining a few things, you've gone from 3rd person, to 1st person, also you've made a few typos :T

But keep trying

Shut up punk! *throws into locker*

Nah, just kidding. It was an interesting story to read. And Crash has said any comments I wanted to, like telling the story in 3rd person then suddenly it's 1st person.
Over all I thought it was good, just keep working on your writing and you'll get there.