Hey everyone! I just wanted to know what you thought about my fanfic, Animal Crossing: My New Leaf. I know I only have one chapter(more like 3 parts that makes one chapter) so far, but I want to know if you like it! If so, I will keep it going until June 9th(the release date), then I'll have some decisions to make. So please, tell me what do you think!
Your thoughts so far...
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From one writer to another (and one who has done a few animal crossing things in his day... glad I deleted that) I would suggest branching out from Animal Crossing. You're confining yourself to such a small and restrictive universe, unless you plan on doing something different with it. The style in which you write seems too Roleplayish to me. Even now, so as to avoid writing like that, I roleplay in a story format. The break up of dialogue in a list with each name like you have becomes dull and an quickly lose the reader's attention. I know it is easier that way, however, you lose some of the art. Think of it this way, which looks better?
I would also say to avoid the overuse of punctuation and capitalization. I have rarely seen a writer use "!?" or extensive caps. Maybe once or twice, but what you can type in punctuation, you can say artfully through writing.
Instead of
It would be better to write something like
I would also avoid the extreme use of ellipses. It would be better to take a more formal approach and write in the pauses. Instead of "..." try just using a period. When someone is trailing off, it would be okay. Like when your characters are stuttering or saying "uh...", or something to that effect. The thing that also stood out to me was your use of the "&" symbol. It would be better to write out the word "and" instead of using the symbol.
I had this problem when I was younger. I would write like I spoke. It's something every writer has to get past. It comes with experience and even age. Every writer has a certain "voice", if you will, when he or she writes. More often that not, I write more eloquently than I speak. You will get better with practice. Just keep going at it and never give up!
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Pride and Prejudice said:
I would also say to avoid the overuse of punctuation and capitalization. I have rarely seen a writer use "!?" or extensive caps. Maybe once or twice, but what you can type in punctuation, you can say artfully through writing.
Instead of
It would be better to write something like
I would also avoid the extreme use of ellipses. It would be better to take a more formal approach and write in the pauses. Instead of "..." try just using a period. When someone is trailing off, it would be okay. Like when your characters are stuttering or saying "uh...", or something to that effect. The thing that also stood out to me was your use of the "&" symbol. It would be better to write out the word "and" instead of using the symbol.
I had this problem when I was younger. I would write like I spoke. It's something every writer has to get past. It comes with experience and even age. Every writer has a certain "voice", if you will, when he or she writes. More often that not, I write more eloquently than I speak. You will get better with practice. Just keep going at it and never give up!
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Pushing all of those onto yourself when you write is extremely strenuous and I think it really blocks the creative flow when you try to.
I would suggest writing how you normally do, and then go back and edit through it with the above suggestions. Otherwise you're going to be too worried about writing punctually than you are about actually writing.
With AC being such a small universe, I agree that you should expand your reach outside of it. Take it from me. I've written a LOT of short stories and even a very few longer ones based on video game universes. My advice is, if you're going to stick to a universe that has already been laid out for you, get creative with it. Push the boundaries that are there and fill it in with your own bits.
Anything that has to do with actual gameplay would be best to avoid in a story. An AC example would be Resetti. He's only purpose in the game is to remind you to save your game and to not reset it. Obviously that's something you're not going to want to bring up in your story. Instead, he could be the head of the town committee. That way he gets to keep his role personality with a different goal.
Also, this isn't a quote from me but it's very true nonetheless.
"The main rule of writing is that, if you do it with enough assurance and confidence, you're allowed to do whatever you like."
I would suggest writing how you normally do, and then go back and edit through it with the above suggestions. Otherwise you're going to be too worried about writing punctually than you are about actually writing.
With AC being such a small universe, I agree that you should expand your reach outside of it. Take it from me. I've written a LOT of short stories and even a very few longer ones based on video game universes. My advice is, if you're going to stick to a universe that has already been laid out for you, get creative with it. Push the boundaries that are there and fill it in with your own bits.
Anything that has to do with actual gameplay would be best to avoid in a story. An AC example would be Resetti. He's only purpose in the game is to remind you to save your game and to not reset it. Obviously that's something you're not going to want to bring up in your story. Instead, he could be the head of the town committee. That way he gets to keep his role personality with a different goal.
Also, this isn't a quote from me but it's very true nonetheless.
"The main rule of writing is that, if you do it with enough assurance and confidence, you're allowed to do whatever you like."
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