Can I ask to someone to correct my English text?

[Cirice]

I'm French and I have a task to give next week in English, and I was looking for someone who could help me, and see if my syntax, grammar, vocabulary,... was ok, and maybe give me some synonyms for a better work.

Here it is:

Lehdya - aka DPZ - is a digital illustrator known on DeviantART. His name, gender, age, and any other informations about him are unknown, but a lot of people refers to DPZ as "they" (using the singular They ) to be neutral, because he said he was gender-neutral and didn't want to be called "he" or "she". He's also a great defender of the LGBTQIA+ community, by creating non-binary characters and posting about all thoses minorities. He began to post his fanart in 2010, when he was a fan of videogames, and managed a blog from 2010 to 2013, where he talked about his real-life problems with his family and people. Now his drawings are more general and his artstyle is now unique.

Recently, he participated to a design contest, where he had to draw a promotional artwork for the French virtual singer "ALYS" , and he ended at the second place.

Even if DPZ is not really famous apart from DeviantART, he's my favourite visual artist from the beginning, that is to say when his artworks were very simple. I just love the way he colors, he represents feelings and makes allegories of everything. I also love the way he mixes bright colors with dark ones. I wish I could draw like him. And because he's not really well-known, I though that talking about him here would spill his name a bit more.


Yes I'm talking about me .n. But I can't use the "they" pronoun all over the text because the teacher will say it's not correct...

 

[Azza]

The only thing I can pick out off the top of my head (it's past 10 pm) is that in the last sentence, you said "though" instead of "thought". And I'm not too sure on the "would spill his name a bit more", but maybe that's just me? I can't manage to think of anything to replace it with though, I might have another look when I wake up

EDIT: Oh, and in the second sentence, I think it's just refer instead of refers

 

[Earth Wolf-Howl]

All right. I'll put any corrections and notes in the text itself in bold.

Lehdya - aka DPZ - is a digital illustrator known on (I'm not sure if 'known on' makes complete sense. Maybe 'who is a member of' might work better?) DeviantART. His name, gender, age, and any other information about him are unknown, but a lot of people refers to DPZ as "they" (using the singular they ) to be neutral, because he said he was gender-neutral and didn't want to be called "he" or "she". He's also a great defender of the LGBTQIA+ community, by creating non-binary characters and posting about all those (Just to note, 'those' will never end in 's'. It's always just 'those'.) minorities. He began to post his fanart in 2010, when he was a fan of videogames, and managed a blog from 2010 to 2013, where he talked about his real-life problems with his family and people. Now his drawings are more general and his art style is now unique.

Recently, he participated in a design contest, where he had to draw a promotional artwork for the French virtual singer "ALYS" , and he ended at the second place. (similarly, it sounds awkward. I'm going to suggest 'placed in second' instead.)

Even if DPZ is not really famous apart from DeviantART, he has been (he's, that is to say, 'he is' doesn't work with the tense you've used here) my favourite visual artist from the beginning, that is to say when his artworks were very simple. I just love the way he colors, he represents feelings and makes allegories of everything. I also love the way he mixes bright colors with dark ones. I wish I could draw like him. And because he's not really well-known, I though that talking about him here would spread (I like spill, but spread is the more conventional choice here) his name a bit more.

Aside from a few mistakes, I thought this was excellent- especially as English is apparently a difficult language to learn.

 

[milkday]

Lehdya - aka DPZ - is a digital illustrator on DeviantART. His name, gender, age, and any other information about him are unknown, but a lot of people refers to DPZ as "they" (using the singular They ) to be neutral, because he said he was gender-neutral and didn't want to be called "he" or "she". He's also a great defender of the LGBTQIA+ community, by creating non-binary characters and posting about all thoses minorities. He began to post his fanart in 2010, when he was a fan of videogames, and managed a blog from 2010 to 2013, where he talked about his real-life problems with his family and people. Now his drawings are more general and his artstyle is now unique.

Recently, he participated in a design contest, where he had to draw a promotional artwork for the French virtual singer "ALYS" , and he ended at the second place.

Even if DPZ is not really famous apart from DeviantART, he's my favourite visual artist from the beginning, that is to say when his artworks were very simple. I just love the way he colors, he represents feelings and makes allegories of everything. I also love the way he mixes bright colors with dark ones. I wish I could draw like him. And because he's not really well-known, I thought that talking about him here would spill his name a bit more. the spill bit sounds a little odd, perhaps say you'd like to share his work?

I have removed some bits

 

[Cirice]

Thanks a lot everybody!

 

[Earth Wolf-Howl]

Not a problem! Glad to have helped.

 

[TarzanGirl]

I made quite a few edits:

Lehdya - aka DPZ - is a DeviantART digital illustrator. His name, gender, age, and any other information about him are unknown, but a lot of people refer to DPZ as "they" (using the singular They ) to be neutral, because he said he was gender-neutral and didn't want to be called "he" or "she." He also supports the LGBTQIA+ community by creating non-binary characters and posting about these minorities. He began to post his fanart in 2010, when he was a fan of video games, and managed a blog from 2010 to 2013, where he talked about his real-life problems with his family and other people. Now his drawings are more general and his art style is now unique.

He recently participated in a design contest where he had to draw promotional artwork for the French virtual singer "ALYS," and he ended in second place.

Even if DPZ is not really famous apart from DeviantART, he's my favourite visual artist from the beginning, that is to say, when his artworks were very simple. I just love the way he colors; he represents feelings and makes allegories of everything. I also love the way he mixes bright colors with dark ones. I wish I could draw like him. And because he's not really well-known, I though that talking about him here would spread his name a bit more.

 

[ItsMilkypink]

Lehdya - aka DPZ - is a digital illustrator and a member of DeviantART. His name, gender, age, and any other information about him is unknown, but a lot of people refer to DPZ as "they" (using the singular They ) to be neutral, because he said he was gender-neutral and didn't want to be called "he" or "she". He's also a great defender of the LGBTQIA+ community, by creating non-binary characters and posting about all those minorities. He began to post his fanart in 2010, when he was a fan of videogames, and managed a blog from 2010 to 2013, where he talked about his real-life problems with his family and people. Now, his drawings are more general and his art style is unique.

Recently, he participated in a design contest, where he had to draw a promotional artwork for the French virtual singer "ALYS" , and he finished in second place.

Even if DPZ is not really famous apart from DeviantART, he has been my favourite visual artist from the beginning, that is to say when his artworks were very simple. I just love the way he colors, he represents feelings and makes allegories of everything. I also love the way he mixes bright colors with dark ones. I wish I could draw like him. And because he's not really well-known, I thought that talking about him here would spill his name a bit more.

My English isn't perfect as I'm only in Year 8 (Grade 7), but I've tried my best to correct your text.