Hmm, I like lots of dialogue, as long as there's description to go along with it. imo it's more bleak to just read about how one character did this and that and also that (not that you do that). :3 Oh, and I also noticed that sometimes you have no italicized words for a looong time and then there's like 3 in one sentence. idk if that's intentional or not though?
Oh, and are Leihi and the character in your avatar going to appear in the story? :3 And when are you going to update?? I need more lol o.o