So I read until chapter 5 so far
I think the setting is quite interesting and you're really so good at writing!! Though, sometimes it's a bit hard to understand since it's a bit more difficult written than Evvie's story.
I think Loura is a little bit boring though because she has so many stereotypes. Kirrin is interesting and a little bit boring at the same time XD First I thought it's a male, but it's a female, right? XD I also originally thought that Leihi would be the main protagonist for some reason. I really like Leihi's character design, probably because of that ^^ I also think the progress in chapter 3 & 4 is a bit slow. But ya know, I have no knowledge about how to write a novel, so don't take my opinions too seriously XD For me, the most important about a story are the characters and the setting. How the story progresses is very important too of course. As I am still at chapter 5, I can't really tell what the "goal" of the story is. I'm staying tuned