It was awesome! *claps loudly* Although, I'd add in Jasper would never be as disloyal as some of the killers *cough*Teela*cough* were to push Komaeda to want to manipulate Jasper.
Yay! Glad you liked it! My friend, Blue, added them~
I don't feel like I'm "done" with it so I might go back and nit-pick to make sure it's flowing correctly before moving on. Editing chapters 3-7 will go relatively quickly then I can write chapter 8! *grins*
that like, everyone ( your two, ethre get on a ride, then me and beardo, then my other character and i think bluwolf will get on a ride together, then in the middle of the ride, they all black out, waking up under the amusement park ))