Banned because uh... what?
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The "You're Banned" Game
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Banned because uh... what?
Banned because horror is always fun!
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Banned for being ninja'd, man...that's weak.
Banned because horror is always fun!
Banned because want to see?~
Banned because yes! I am so down for some horror today.
Banned because horror is always fun!
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Banned for being ninja'd, man...that's weak.
Banned because you're weak.
Banned because alright! I'll start reading it, now ^-^
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Banned because I know.
Banned because I hope you enjoy! Hopefully, I'll get chapter three up by tomorrow.
Banned because I'm sure you'll get there someday! You just have to practice and keep writing. ^^
Banned because wrong answer.
ellabella12345
not-even-in-a-pickle
banned because right
Banned because I like it. There's a few little things though. You put gross instead of grass (7th paragraph, 2nd chapter), and locked instead of looked (12th paragraph, 2nd chapter) xD. Also, in the 17th paragraph, where he mentions his rival. That bit, "That was strange. What did he mean by that?" looks a bit awkward, as if he was thinking that to himself, rather than Ebony thinking that. Last thing, I swear, they keep addressing each other as "the other" rather than ever personally addressing each other, seemingly. That seems a bit awkward to me...but that's just me. I do, however, really like it, and I'm looking forward to continuing it and seeing what crazy **** goes down!
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Banned because you can't judge whether my answer is wrong or not.
Banned because I like it. There's a few little things though. You put gross instead of grass (7th paragraph, 2nd chapter), and locked instead of looked (12th paragraph, 2nd chapter) xD. Also, in the 17th paragraph, where he mentions his rival. That bit, "That was strange. What did he mean by that?" looks a bit awkward, as if he was thinking that to himself, rather than Ebony thinking that. Last thing, I swear, they keep addressing each other as "the other" rather than ever personally addressing each other, seemingly. That seems a bit awkward to me...but that's just me. I do, however, really like it, and I'm looking forward to continuing it and seeing what crazy **** goes down!
Banned because thank you! I fixed all of those things. I'll look into "the other" thing right now. I'm glad you're liking it. ^w^
Banned because np! ^_^
I am. I was really into the chapters, I felt like I just sped through them. I have some sort of prejudice against prologues XD
I don't know why. Like, I get their purpose...I just hate their existence xD
Your prologue is great. I'm just a weird person ^^
Banned because yay!~
Hehe, that's good. Oooh, really? I like prologues. They're nice intros to help get into a story~
Niice. XD
Thanks! <3
I love how much bickering this story has. I feel like these two will argue about every single little thing. Oh, and I have a feeling that Ebony will mess up on the first murder. lmao
Banned because I dunno, man. I just hate them xD I usually skip them in books, but I realize I kind of need to read them, in order to get what's going on, but I always prefer to be able to just jump right into the story. Omg, I have this one book, and the prologue is like 30 pages long, small print, too. It was ridiculous. I still have the book, too. I never got passed the first chapter xD
Yeah, I like the bickering. It just makes them seem more lively and fun to read about. That would be funny, if she did. As long as she doesn't get caught, of course. If she does, then Cade is just going to have bust her out! xD Oh, man, it's amazing to think how many different ways you could go with that story xD
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Banned because hooray for peer editing and constructive criticism
Banned because oh, yeah! Here
the videos, again ^^ I forgot to link you to them again, last night, after you asked.