Critique my practice~ (Go to page 5)

[Benevoir]

Wow, no complaints from me!
That's absolutely fantastic, thank you!

No worries! Glad that I was able to help. ^^

 

[Albuns]

Further experimentation on hair with my own drawing style led to this thing.
So, how's it look?

 

[Mink]

I'm horrible at giving criticism, so I'll just tell you the things I notice hehe
-His legs/arms look disproportional, like the legs look too small for the upper half (is it supposed to be bending?, and the arms look short
-Hair still looks stiff like those blocks of hair thingies the back of the hair looks like a leaf
-I like the shading, shirt thing could use a few more wrinkles and creases
hehe i'm not a pro but these are just a few things I notice ^^

 

[Albuns]

I'm horrible at giving criticism, so I'll just tell you the things I notice hehe
-His legs/arms look disproportional, like the legs look too small for the upper half (is it supposed to be bending?, and the arms look short
-Hair still looks stiff like those blocks of hair thingies the back of the hair looks like a leaf
-I like the shading, shirt thing could use a few more wrinkles and creases
hehe i'm not a pro but these are just a few things I notice ^^

Dammit, even now, the hair still looks stiff. </3
Ya, I kinda didn't know how to draw the limbs from that sort of angle, so I had to fiddle around a bit.
Yep, was trying to make the legs bend.

Thank you for the critic~ ^^

 

[Mink]

No problem, maybe try practicing by focusing on making fast curved strokes of hair instead of like going 2cm again and again c: (cause that's what I do lol) are you using references/tracing? In the beginning, tracing really helps you get into the feel of what good proportions/how to make clean lines until you get the hang of it (obviously don't do it when you want to truly draw later on in life but starting out xD) I always use references when I draw, so I know what I did wrong, where the shading goes, and what areas in the drawing I can improve on, etc. c:

 

[Albuns]

I've been messing around with some new styles of shading and this is what I've come up with. Critiques?

 

[piichinu]

i dont think the hair looks stiff its just angled strangely in some drawings

 

[Albuns]

i dont think the hair looks stiff its just angled strangely in some drawings

Angled strangely? o:

 

[axo]

I've been messing around with some new styles of shading and this is what I've come up with. Critiques?

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The shading has gotten much better as well as face proportions, but the body seems very out of proportion to the arms and head size.

 

[Albuns]

The shading has gotten much better as well as face proportions, but the body seems very out of proportion to the arms and head size.

Ya, I was going to make the chest a bit bigger, but I feel like it would look like he has breasts... ;u;

 

[crystalmilktea]

The er back of his torso should be covered by his right arm, so if that white space were a line on the side of his shirt it would look much better!

I think the biggest thing you need to practice is proportions! Maybe try looking at pictures where the character is posed the same way, and drawing with those as a reference?

 

[Albuns]

The er back of his torso should be covered by his right arm, so if that white space were a line on the side of his shirt it would look much better!

I think the biggest thing you need to practice is proportions! Maybe try looking at pictures where the character is posed the same way, and drawing with those as a reference?

Ooh, good idea! I made this sketch with only using references for the hair. Guess I know what I'll be polishing up now. Thanks! x3